I wrote your name

As I sat alone on the seashore
watching the sun fade away,
I carved your name on the floor
but the waves did not let that stay.

As I stood on a rock so dry
wishing the dark clouds gave way,
I wrote your name in the sky
but the wind blew it away.

As I walked across the park in glee
enjoying the life that moved in flash,
I engraved your name on the tree
but the blaze turned it to ash.

As I slept on my bed lone and sole
dreaming about everything you and me,
I etched your name in my heart and soul
and now there is nothing but we.

———————

This is my entry for Carry On Tuesday #30 prompt – I wrote your name in the sky but the wind blew it away.

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  1. #1 by Psych Babbler on December 8, 2009 - 5:00 pm

    WOW!!!!!

    That’s just amazingly beautiful Titaxy!!! So visual, so deep, so vivid…just beautiful…can’t find any more adjectives to describe it but would if I could!!! Keep up the awesome work!!!

    thank you so much, Psych…it means a lot to hear this 🙂 thank you!

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    • #2 by Psych Babbler on December 9, 2009 - 5:23 am

      Yay! I was first! Before Matt and Misty! 😀

      yes you were 😀

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      • #3 by Matty on December 10, 2009 - 12:52 am

        Yaay!…It is nice to get acknowledged! 🙂

        😆

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  2. #4 by BlueMist on December 8, 2009 - 5:04 pm

    First 🙂

    nop 😀

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    • #5 by BlueMist on December 9, 2009 - 12:44 pm

      Guessed So after reading PB’s comment on my post. 😀

      😀

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  3. #6 by BlueMist on December 8, 2009 - 5:08 pm

    Very very well done. and I loved the way you made it flow. Amazing 🙂

    thank you v much, BM…

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  4. #7 by comfortablynam on December 8, 2009 - 6:16 pm

    I really like the..now there is nothing but we..part.
    The heart and the soul is the only permanent part is there not? The one place where our loved ones stay always never to be erased..till the time we are no more..but then again they say the soul lives on..so our love for the ones close to us lives on..
    Beautifully written..

    yup..heart is where it is all permanent 🙂 …thanks a lot, comfortablynam.

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  5. #8 by viswajithkn on December 8, 2009 - 7:44 pm

    Stunning… 😀 I guess you are meant to do something in literature… 😀
    btw whose name is it? 😛

    literature? oh come on :D…don’t be so nice :D…you know it’s not true :-)..this is nothing 🙂

    thank you!!!

    and the name – well there are many.. :D…no scarcity to find a name to write 😛 …

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    • #9 by viswajithkn on December 8, 2009 - 8:36 pm

      This is just like you commenting on my album right… 😛 Seriously that poem was good. You have got some talent other than wotever u r doing and if literature is what u r doing then you will go places… 😛

      well not really…i said i liked your photos and that you had a talent…never compared it to the highest achievement in photography field (i dunno what it is to photography as literature is to writing)…

      anyway 😀 thank you so much..

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      • #10 by viswajithkn on December 8, 2009 - 9:35 pm

        see…i just said you will go places but I never mentioned that it will be the pinnacle…:D just goofing around…now i have kept this comment without submitting it for almost an hr!

        ok …maybe i misunderstood :D… thanks for the nicest words :D…

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      • #11 by viswajithkn on December 8, 2009 - 10:37 pm

        omg…i was being sarcastic…accidentally sollitaen…your poem is good. sud have stopped thr…:D and yeah thats the infinith time you have thanked…:D

        😀 i know i know.. 😀

        you don’t like being thanked much, do you? 😛

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      • #12 by viswajithkn on December 8, 2009 - 10:47 pm

        I dont mind being thanked. But I have lost the number of times you have said thank you within some three four days starting with the white snow thing. Sun sun ke kaan pak gaye…read it in some hindi actor ishtyle…:D

        lol …ok no more thanking you for a while 😛

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  6. #13 by Mahmud faisal on December 8, 2009 - 8:40 pm

    consecutive nice writing….
    thanks for it! 🙂

    thank you, sir 🙂 i’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  7. #14 by SG on December 8, 2009 - 8:53 pm

    Ahhhh. The ending was sooooo romantic.

    thank you!!

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  8. #15 by Nu on December 8, 2009 - 9:41 pm

    Soooooooooper Doooooooper HIT !! Very touchy and flowing with love…so nice thoughts come to your mind…sahi hai !!!

    🙂

    thank you, sweetheart!

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  9. #16 by Sakhi on December 8, 2009 - 11:17 pm

    Absolutely mushy!! 😀 😀 Lovely! 🙂

    thank you!

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  10. #17 by Pixie on December 8, 2009 - 11:36 pm

    T, that was beautiful!

    thank you!

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  11. #18 by Swaram on December 9, 2009 - 12:32 am

    Oh thatz just one of the best I hv read in the blogosphere 🙂 Loved the flow and such a sweet msg that one 🙂

    thank you!!!

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  12. #19 by gs batty on December 9, 2009 - 12:33 am

    adding the different places to write the name is a stroke of genius. Well done .

    thank you very much…and welcome!!

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  13. #20 by Dido on December 9, 2009 - 2:35 am

    WOWWWWW

    🙂 thanks !

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  14. #21 by Smitha on December 9, 2009 - 5:01 am

    That was beautiful!

    thank you 🙂

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  15. #22 by krags on December 9, 2009 - 5:26 am

    Beautiful … And , deep as usual …
    The owner of that name seems pretty lucky to me 😛 ; Hopefully he deserves it 🙂

    of course he (or shud I say they because the list is long 😉 ) deserves it :D…

    thank you 🙂

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  16. #23 by divz on December 9, 2009 - 6:06 am

    beautiful!

    thank you dear!

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  17. #24 by Reema on December 9, 2009 - 8:24 am

    wonderful!

    thank you!

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  18. #25 by Ranju on December 9, 2009 - 9:54 am

    beautiful titaxy !!!!

    do tell whom were you thinking of when you wrote this 😉

    thank you dear…

    i was thinking of 4 different people 😛 ….one name for each stanza… 😆

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  19. #26 by sands on December 9, 2009 - 11:28 am

    Beautiful, really beautiful!

    thank yoU!

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  20. #27 by chatterbox on December 9, 2009 - 3:10 pm

    Simply wonderful.
    The flow of words and the surge of emotions all so beautiful 🙂

    I loved your heart warming romantic end.

    Keep up the good work buddy 😀

    Cheers!!

    thank you dear!

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  21. #28 by shraddha on December 10, 2009 - 12:31 am

    very nicely done dear!!

    absolutely lovely..

    thank you!

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  22. #29 by Matty on December 10, 2009 - 12:54 am

    Someone got to take the Bridport prize!!

    Lovely!! 😀 😀

    are you the one handing it out?…you are talking about it as if you are the one deciding who to give it to :P…

    thanks, Matt!

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    • #30 by Matty on December 10, 2009 - 12:39 pm

      Well I can pull some strings … 😀 😛

      😀 ok then..who am i to stop you…do it 😉 :loL:

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  23. #31 by noname on December 10, 2009 - 5:03 am

    Simply awesome! Genius! I must say it again, you are gifted, truly. Take care and keep writing.

    thank you very much 🙂

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  24. #32 by Nu on February 2, 2010 - 5:56 am

    This made to the final selection for voting 🙂 Good Luck

    http://alchemistpoonam.wordpress.com/2010/02/02/final-nominations-in-avant-garde-bloggies-awards-2009/

    yay!

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